Thriving Fire

OK, this is my first storybook so I don't expect a whole ton of responses, especially with the caption I've put under the title. Oh well. Rules: 1) NO ENDINGS. ...

I know I'm jumping from extremes with this, especially after Hiding in Neverland, but who cares? When it All Falls Down You always seemed to notice me When I was ...

What's up Jessy? Or Halleluja? Or Northener? Or whatever the hell your called! Anyway... Welcome to YWS. I'd say you can PM me about anything (and you can!) but you ...

Bloody hell, that was deep. Your use of images is incredible, dark and intriguing, if a bit depressing in parts. The rhyme scheme was a bit all over the place ...

Dictatorship gone wrong? That is possibly the most ominous introduction I've EVER seen... Anyway, welcome to YWS... Hope you enjoy it.

I don't really get your avatar but it looks cool so 8/10

I quite like this simply because it's uplifting but perhaps you could extend it a little bit? It just seems a bit short at the moment. Nonetheless it's simple and ...

Not to sound like I'm 'bumping' this (whatever that means), but can I please see some replies to this story. It was going well and I'm beginning to care about ...

Yeah, I like this... I get the sense of someone or something lonely, something alone in it's mysteriousness. 'Stumpy chimney, Marred with dark soot, But no smoke here cuts the ...

I think nobody's replying because your own sense of good is different from everyone else's... No offence.

Yeah, but come on... The thing's in a zoo! It's not like he's roaming around, free as a bird! And it would surprise me if the animal rights people took ...

I'd like to see how those animal rights activists treat humans... The only reason someone or something should die is if nature takes its course with them, or if they ...

Granted, but then there would be too many and you'd get sick of all the annoying noobs. I wish I knew what happened when people die (cheerful, eh?)

Not bad at all... The atmosphere is tense and dark, and the violence is suitably sickening. Your evil character is well written, a bit cliched perhaps, being a beautiful woman, ...

Thanks Mad. I'm going to try and edit the story whenever someone suggests something, and I've taken away some of the brackets, like you said. I would have taken them ...